Week 11 Story: The Apple Tree
King Jacob had a very special tree to him and his people. He thought it was so special that he built a wall around his town. They had a tree that was filled with fresh apples. They were crisp, sweet and juicy. As you bit into it juices would flow from it. This apple gave them the nutrients they needed, they were not like any other people because this could sustain them. Other people around them could not know about this tree because they would want it all for themselves. A young boy, Timmy, was picking apples and had the idea to sell them at a farmers market in the city right next to them.
Timmy: Come get your local apples, they are the best apples you could ever have!
Crowds of people: I want one, I want 5, I want some, take me to the tree.
Timmy: This tree is a secret and you will never find it.
Timmy made so much money, but he would have to pay a much worse price in the end. The crowds of people began to whisper and talk poorly of Timmy.
Later that night the city people began searching for the tree. They followed Timmy home to find what town he lived in. They were thirsty for the apples and blood of these people. King Jacob knew that this day would come and he began to blow the horn to warn the people. The people were trapped so King Jacob had to lift people up over their wall because there was no way out and it was so tall. King Jacob used his body as a human ladder. He knew that this was how he would serve and protect his people. One by one each person began to climb up the king. The king began to grow weak and the crowd was closing in on them. Before the king could climb up the crowd killed him because of his lavish apple tree. The people mourned and began to figure how to eat without these apples.
Author's Notes:
I wanted to retell "The Monkey Bridge". This story was about a kingdom of monkeys that had a mango tree right by the river. They were not allowed to let the mangos fall into the river because people then would try to come look for the tree of mangos. People began to search for the mangos. They were going to kill the monkeys but the king acted as a bridge between trees so that they could escape. The king died from helping them. I wanted to use real people and an apple tree. I feel like in life we are so greed and this story is explaining that. This story really stuck out to me so I wanted to tell the story of apples. Also, I love apples so that helped.
Bibliography:
Twenty Jātaka tales, The Monkey Bridge, Noor Inayat, 1999.
Timmy: Come get your local apples, they are the best apples you could ever have!
Crowds of people: I want one, I want 5, I want some, take me to the tree.
Timmy: This tree is a secret and you will never find it.
Timmy made so much money, but he would have to pay a much worse price in the end. The crowds of people began to whisper and talk poorly of Timmy.
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I wanted to retell "The Monkey Bridge". This story was about a kingdom of monkeys that had a mango tree right by the river. They were not allowed to let the mangos fall into the river because people then would try to come look for the tree of mangos. People began to search for the mangos. They were going to kill the monkeys but the king acted as a bridge between trees so that they could escape. The king died from helping them. I wanted to use real people and an apple tree. I feel like in life we are so greed and this story is explaining that. This story really stuck out to me so I wanted to tell the story of apples. Also, I love apples so that helped.
Bibliography:
Twenty Jātaka tales, The Monkey Bridge, Noor Inayat, 1999.
Hey Elizabeth! This story was really sad, it definitely shows the greed of people in two different ways - first, Timothy feeling the need to sell the apples for his own gain, and second for the buyers being willing to kill a king so they could have the special apples. King Jacob is so selfless in sacrificing himself to save his people.
ReplyDeleteHey Izzy! Sad story. Timmy wanted money so he sold the apples which eventually caused the death of a King Jacob. I think your version was very well written only part i was confused was the end where he was lifting people up the wall to save them? How were they trapped? Overall, nice story and keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHello again Izzy! Good work on your story! The only thing you might work on is the formatting of your dialogue. If it's script format, your dialogue is fine, but then your descriptions need to be more clearly part of a script. If it's prose, I would format your dialogue more traditionally. Example: "Come get your local apples, they are the best apples you could ever have!" Timmy said.
ReplyDeleteHey again Izzy! I definitely liked this story. I thought you did a great job writing this story to be in a digestible format that is much better than the original "Monkey Bridge" story. The main thing I would say is to change the way you did your dialogue, and make it into a more traditional novel format. This would make the story even more readable.
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